>>609
"Twelve lines" say you, sir?
This sounds like a perfect task
For a renga.

DQN and poetry
Thus are together at last.

Well, that is to say,
Apart from many song threads,
If you'd claim those count.

However, their lines were most
Vulgar and profane at times.

So this just might be
DQN's first true poem,
Which is complete now.

>>610
Critique my poem. If you can, write an improved version.